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Thanks. I don't even know where this idea came from, but I think I'll write a short story for it as well... Maybe. Thanks for the critique. Olli

I thought this was dark and twisted, and I'm not going to lie. I kind of loved it. I wasn't confused at all. I was just, captivated by the story. ...

Also Mylifemypain, Kayla is from NewZealand, like me. We spell Mom as Mum. lol

This seems so much like I Am Ledgend... and as i said before, you need to add more. Just because I know you personally, I'm gonna say this: HURRY UP ...

No realisation has an 's' ok? Different countries. My country uses 's' way more than 'z'. lol

No prob :D

I cant believe you used the c word man... thats low. But all in all really good... It seemed a bit choppy in some places, but this being a dialog ...

Sory its short... just seing if you guys like the idea...

I will come back to it. Just when I find the will to finish a story... lol. Maybe on my birthday I'll continue it. Olli

Sorry if I confused you guys, it's just a short story. *AAAwwwww* Jokes. Will do, with the adding of description, that has always been my flaw in writing. PEACE Olli

Actually, i tried to write a chapter one. i failed so this story is going into my drafts....sorry if you liked this. I will have another story pssibility coming soonn

Hehe. Ok, the word Whanau is Maori, in New Zealand, we have many cultures, but the main aree european, and Maori. So dont bother asking what the words mean. I ...

Thanks. It was really hard.

Very good. One error. "And now," I continued, "you're heart broken" It should be heart's broken. :) Olli

Hehe,good idea to do a story with the same concept *high fives* olli