wamdog321

I think this it great. I love the personification. You need to put in the first sentence I am a fragile,brittle girl. I told you to put that so your ...

I think this is good. First you need to take out all of those strike out marks. After that you need to fix the part where it says horribly boring. ...

i think this is good. First the first two sentences are the same thing. you can take out one of those sentences. Third you have three errors in the third ...

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This is a pretty good story. First in paragraph 4 the knocks should be spaced so people can read it clearly. In paragraph 5 sentence 2 change I and Anna. ...

I think this is really good but it has some flaws. In the first sentence you need to fix the part were it says but it is try to me. ...

I think it is good but a few things. First make sure you space after your periods. In your story you can take out the parenthesis. In the second paragraph ...

I think your story is good but you have some errors. One thing you need to fix is in the first sentence i figured out you meant to say father ...