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Hey Caeai, This piece is full of emotion and is very powerful. You capture the imagined conversation between the Grandfather and main character really well. I especially like the line ...

Hi SparkOfDoubt, This is a lovely piece. I really connect to the narrator and his feelings for the girl. You've managed to avoid most of the cliches that can often ...

Hey Skittles :) First off I love the ending, you're good at weaving in light humour to add contrast to the tone. From what I can tell with regards to ...

Hi Rosa, I really like this piece :) you've got a really nice rhythm to it. (I was reading it as if there were line breaks when there is a ...

Wow! This is really good. I was hanging onto every word. The topic you have chosen is fascinating and the relationship between the sisters is conveyed really well. Your dialogue ...

Hey Tori, In most cases I would agree with Griffinkeeper however in your case I have to disagree. Stream of Consciousness can be a way of writing with out any ...

Hey, for starters I want to say that this story has a really fascinating topic; I wanted to read on and that is probably the most important thing with a ...

I love this, you've chosen a really interesting topic and interpreted it really well. Well done! The only thing I would point out is the repetition of many in the ...

Hey Emily, This was really good I loved it and couldn't stop reading. The passion and emotions were just pouring out of every word. I really like the rhythm in ...

Hey! I really enjoyed this poem especially your use of ellipses at the end of each stanza, that had a really nice effect. However I think some of your rhymes ...

Hey bekiw! I loved this story, it was a really sweet piece and I really felt the emotions coming through. There's not much I would change apart from there being ...