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Re: Cockroaches and Condoms
The title was very interesting and draws you in. The entire story seems more funny than romantic, which is actually better. The dialogue is amusing and the whole situation is ...
Apr 15, 2010 -
Re: The Dream Snatcher
A good title that fits with the story. It was very simplistic which is what you would expect from a young child. At times though it seemed slightly unfoucsed. It ...
Apr 15, 2010 -
Re: They'll Never Know
An interesting story, not too bad a read. I liked how, especially at the start, you made effective use of short sentances to better mirror the narrators emotions. I think ...
Apr 14, 2010 -
Re: The death of innocence.
Certainly seeemed to be an approprite title for the poem. Your lines never seemed to be too long or toe short which can happen sometime. There was some rythem (however ...
Apr 13, 2010 -
Re: Crimson
Well that was certainly interesting, I can see that the wikipedia definition is right when it likens it to a haiku only like extended. I liked the similarity in it ...
Feb 12, 2010 -
Re: Into the Void
Not that bad a poem, I quite liked the description in it especially at the start. Just going to point out now a few things Id have changed or think ...
Feb 12, 2010 -
Re: Maybe the Sun Will Set Tomorrow
First things first; I'm not all that sure what that was about. That doesn't hinder some form of appreciation of a poem though so my reviews not going to be ...
Jun 19, 2009 -
Re: I know why the caged one...
It was an okay poem, I didn't really like it though. Yes, I'm just about to say it, repitition. It was good at the beginning but then it just started ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: This Night Is Ours
I've said this before and I'm sure I'm going to end up saying it for the rest of today; abbreviating is always good, helps maintain the flow of the poem. ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: Rage
Now most people don't realy focus that much if a poem is too long and dismiss it as being bad if it's too short. Yours was a little on the ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: I Will Always Be Your Friend.
I find that when it comes to poetry it's better to abbreviate like saying it's instead of it is, it helps keep a rythm and pace in the poem. That's ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: I don't Understand You.
Certainly very interesting, the repitition was wearing a bit thin for me though near the end. I mean, I find repitition very effective but after the third time it's used ...
Jun 17, 2009 -
Re: Spirit Smoke
That was very nice, and well written in my mind at least. Just have to say though, I had no idea what it was about really, that doesn't affect my ...
Jun 17, 2009 -
Re: When You Fall
I see what you meant in your note but that doesn't really matter, all that matters is the content so don't ask why I even said that to begin with. ...
Jun 17, 2009 -
Re: Just me and You
Well it's very simple and it's straight to the point. No meandering around or anything just straight into it. I didn't enjoy it all that much because I was thinking ...
Jun 17, 2009
