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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Hangover

    I absolutely LOVE this poem! It's so symbolic (obviously) and so well put. I started reading this hoping to God it wasn't something stupid. I'm not a fan of stupid ...

    Sat Jan 22, 2011 5:23 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: We Do Not Exist For You.

    This is nice and deep. I love the reverse ends, where it's not the girls tragic story being told, its the one who caused the pain. The reaching is a ...

    Sat Jan 22, 2011 5:19 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Your Dream

    This is a great poem. The imagery of beautiful, then dark, confusion and un-satisfaction is great. I am left not knowing the answer, but that puts me where the writer ...

    Sat Jan 22, 2011 5:12 pm
  • Other » General, General Re: Dear Self- A Letter to Me from Me

    I have written something that this reminds me of. I almost want to post it and let you read it. OH wait! I have it on Deviantart. Here's the link ...

    Sat Jan 22, 2011 5:01 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: I Felt It

    It's odd. I love the meaning behind it, but it's chaotic. There is a difference between organized chaos and pure, down right , wtf is that, chaos. Your's leans more ...

    Sat Jan 22, 2011 4:56 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: River

    This is very soft and short and sweet. It's calming and almost visual but ...not if that makes sense. The only criticism I have is the forth line "To travel ...

    Wed Jan 19, 2011 9:36 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Thank You, My Dear

    Amazing! I love the flow and how it's choppy ( in a good way.) It symbolizes the strife and insanity, confusion and pain that you further describe in your work. ...

    Wed Jan 19, 2011 4:09 pm
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Gale-A hunger Games fanfic

    OKay..I LOVE the hunger games...like...love...and was just like the hunger games. I had to stop reading a couple of times to take a breather ha ha. I am like the ...

    Sat Jan 15, 2011 8:29 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A person dies three times

    This is a wonderful thought. I love how you took the meters and made them awkward. Bringing two thoughts from two sentences in one line. The only thing that I ...

    Tue Jan 11, 2011 4:52 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The truth in the lie

    I really can't 'critique' this. I simply love it. I love it's movement, it's reiteration, a subtle, powerful touch to each stanza. I adore it greatly. I also love how ...

    Tue Jan 11, 2011 4:49 am
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: No such thing as boundries

    This is a great poem. I LOVE the first stanza. The second one confused me. "Right when you thought the road stopped right there Right then you almost gave up ...

    Sun Jan 09, 2011 9:01 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Title Irrelevent Because the Story is Being Rewritten (ch1)

    emmylove, This chapter is a good start. The plot is set and any one can relate to it. There are a few things that could use some jolt though. It ...

    Sun Jan 09, 2011 8:55 am


A diamond is merely a lump of coal that did well under pressure.
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