Its been a year
since you have been
able to choke her.
You cannot reach her
from your dungeon.
Hate has swallowed
you. You are drowning
in your fake pool of
wanted tragedy.
She will not reach out
to grab your hand anymore.
Slowly, your slipping,
and she will not do
your bidding. All those
lies you poisoned her with
still run through her veins,
but she is mended.
Your face can no longer
be seen from above your lies.
You are forgotten.
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It was nice and you very effectively showed the emotions in your piece...
It was too short though could be a bit more lengthy and you could add more spice to it to make it more tasty..... ^^
Keep up the good work...
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This is nice and deep. I love the reverse ends, where it's not the girls tragic story being told, its the one who caused the pain. The reaching is a great metaphor as well as physical attribute to the poem. It's symbolism for both the prisoner and the victim is strong and yearning, regardless on if it is received or not. Being a poet myself, I analyze very far into writings, so forgive me if I am doing that to much with yours. I enjoyed it