Published January 9, 2011
I had a song stuck in my head when I wrote this, so it kind of sounds a little like the song that I had stuck in my head at the time, but I hope it's still an okay poem. Please tell me what you think. 
With every step you climb another mountain
With every glance it's harder to believe
You'll make it through the pain,
And all the hurricanes
Theres no such thing as boundries
Right when you thought the road stopped right there
Right then you almost gave up on your dreams
But they took you by the hand
And showed you that you can
Theres no such thing as boundaries
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You are most welcome! I quite enjoyed reviewing this one!!!
Hey, thanks for your reviews guys!
Okay so lets get the mistakes out first and then we will move to the good. There should be commas after each one except the last line of each paragraph. Theres should be There's and boundries is spelled boundaries. I do not think that in the line it does not need the you in it, without it it sounds better. Also in the line the "But" showed probably be deleted it just does not work.
So that is all that I spotted that was bugging me
Hey! Guess you're an Adam fan
I know this song was stuck in my head too the day I discovered it. You did an excellent job though, switching between words to make is sound and look different from the song. I know, great song, great lyrics and great voice to sing it. You can't possible get bored of it. Good job. I'm going to read more of your poems now 
a very very good job indeed!!! I appreciate the message and the meaning of the poem.... And honestly i do not care whether it sounds like a song or like a ballad...What i care is that it is a wonderful poem!!!
Thanks for the reviews guys!
Wow, sorry cupcake I didn't realize you had a new poem
Overall I liked the rhythm to the poem, it flowed really well. Good Work!
WOW!
I love it!
I would have wanted it to be longer or you could tell us to repeat all of it (x2)!
This is a great poem. I LOVE the first stanza. The second one confused me.
"Right when you thought the road stopped right there
Right then you almost gave up on your dreams
But they took you by the hand
And showed you that you can
Theres no such thing as boundaries"
Perhaps you can consider revising. I do not see why there is a 'but' there. The first two lines are incomplete, leading to something. Drop the "but" and it will flow much better and make more sense.
This is good, and really effective. I like the general rhythm of the poem and the use of repetition.
The imagery is excellent and continuous. It flows really well.
I like how you've subtly rhymed some of the words, it makes it pleasant and really easy to read.
well done you should write more