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Hey there, Mihaivisan! :D Forgive me, for I haven't read your other piece, so please bear with me. bursts of sweet joy I know you're trying to paint an image ...

Hey there, Jalmoc :D Usually when I review a piece, I pick out certain parts as I read to correct. However, due to the size of your work, I decided ...

Hello Again, Jon :D You know what I do, so let's get started. And just a suggestion, you should probably put an 18+ somewhere easily visible when you post stories ...

Hey there, Ikiru! :D I'll warn you in advance, I tend to get a bit excessive with the small details I point out. Hopefully you won't hate me if I ...

Heyo Batjoke! Welcome to YWS! :D I'm here to point out every small mistake I can find and tell you to fix it. So let's begin. Hunting boots, yellowed jeans, ...

Hey there, Awesome! :D If you don't know how I review, I pick out all the small mistakes I can find and rub them in your face see if I ...

Well hello there Vyper ^.^ I don't think I'll have a lot of nitpicks to point out with you, but let's see what I find anyway :D Hm, you seem ...

Hey JOV! Veeren here to point out all the errors in your writing, please don't hate me. For the seventh day 'For' should be 'on'. bite to it. But it ...

Hey there Serenya :D Belated welcome to YWS! Sorry, but I haven't read part of this chapter (which I would assume is implied by the 'continued' at the end of ...

Heyo Omniyus! Hopefully I don't annoy you too much. My shaking fingers led themselves into my pocket, almost naturally, Fingers are fingers, not animals, silly. Maybe you could change it ...

Like I promised. I'm only gonna review chapters 3 and 4 since that's where we left off. Blinding Light. Should be 'The light was blinding.' ;) I don't think your ...

Since you asked so nicely, I couldn't help check out your second chapter. [Well that, and because you said there were no grammar mistakes ;)] Oops, first sentence: hoping I ...

Hey there Jon :D Welcome to YWS! So you wrote something humorous, aye? Let's see how funny it is after I point out every small mistake I can find. You ...

Hello there, Madison :D You see, what we have here is a giant block of text. That's no good. So what I'm going to do to help you out it ...

Hey there Dakota! Welcome to YWS! :D A couple tips before I go into full review mode: - Always make a piece of dialogue it's own paragraph. - Keep one ...