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very good...since so far i have read all the books in the twilight series...this has great detail coming from the books...nice job and keep writing ~Dan

i can easily see that jabberhut and psychicninja had a lot to say about this...but i will make this short...correct the misspellings and continue with the story...i would really like ...

worry you not, dream of the fayth, there will be more details on this in future chapters...i just have not put them up yet

very interesting story...very interesting...you should continue with this story...see if Rowling will make another book, just a sort of spinoff of the original 7 books

i thought it was fairly good but you need to edit some and let us see your improvements

that makes so much sense to me it is not even funny, i thought it was very good.

this is a lot like me...except i wouldnt be crying about a i am not gay or bi...i think...lol

you know...i thought that this was quite good compared to other stuff i have read.

well ill work on editing it as soon as i get the time to do it...

ok i have to admit this... licking batteries is fun but getting killed by them would suck!

if this really happened to you i am sorry. but if it didnt...well...i dont know what to say. this was really good. i also think you should make the ending ...

i think that it was good. you should continue it. but space it out a little like ink said. keep writing!

no offense dude but that was sad. but it was very well written. good job dan

is this for emily? if so tell me monday

was it a cat that was eating it???????