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  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Mental Courtesan

    I have to say I really liked it. The writing I thought was excellent. I have to agree with the comment about how some of the lines didn't really fit. ...

    May 22, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Lilly Saint Grave

    Well hello! I agree with the comments above. And you should start to review. It's quite fun and it helps other writers learn about what they need to work on ...

    May 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Apple

    I was also wondering if this poem was about snow white. I liked how everything in the poem flowed. It had a pretty Nice rhythm to it. I have to ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Death Walked in the Door

    Well first off Hello. I have to say I really liked this poem. It was different and intriguing.The tittle instantly caught my attention. I like the last stanza the best! ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: One. Two. Three. Four.

    I have to agree with the first comment. I didn't really get how everything worked. I did like your choose of words. Like irksome! I did like the repeating of ...

    May 14, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: What The Doctor Ordered

    I agree with the other comments. The last stanza needs a bit of work. I loved the first stanza it made me smile for some reason! I also liked the ...

    May 12, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Hypotheses

    I liked this poem because it was different. All the words flowed quite well with each other. The poem made you want to read it. I read it about four ...

    May 10, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Honeydrops Ahoy!

    The poem was Okay, but I have to agree with the other comments. The poem needs to be a bit more imaginative. The readers need to want to read the ...

    May 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Little If In Space

    I have to agree with the others your poem was so good. The vocabulary you used was perfect and described everything perfectly. I really liked the flow and how everything ...

    May 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Heard In What He Feared

    I really liked this poem. I loved how the words rhymed. Though I also have to agree with the the first comment about it sounding kinda forced, but all in ...

    May 8, 2010


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