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Ignore that post that criticized lack of rhythm. There's no set of characteristics that a poem has to have. The only thing a poem needs to have is words. Whoever ...

Pretty gud. One thing I might point out, especially in the last stanza, is that it kind of seems out of place/vague when you go from sensual descriptions to emotional ...

I enjoyed this. The flow, length, and rhythm work well with your rhyme scheme. Fun to read. I disagree with the other review in saying there wasn't anything lost or ...

Alright, you must have either stolen this from some other site, or you are lying about your age. Seriously, I don't think I've ever seen someone so young with such ...

Hi, Crissy >“What’s that supposed to mean?” she asked. >“You know your brother, Mark?” the voice asked. >“Sadly,” was Sandra’s answer. >“He’s dead,” the voice said. Sandra froze

>“No way!” exclaimed Jamie >“Who would fit those the best?” Randi questioned. >“True, but wouldn’t the same go for a werething?” pointed out Everette. All these words you're using, "excl

>His feet slowly stepped back, his hands felt the coldness of the walls as he backed up shocked. This is a run-on sentence. Some awkward word repetition and order here. ...

>I almost want to leave, but then I see a dream. I lean closer and steal the breath out of the boy. His chest stops, but I could easily return ...

A lot of people seem to be confusing writing a review with correcting people's grammar. I don't really know how to review anything when it comes to writing or plot-pacing, ...

Are you trying to make me hate this character? Because I hate this character. I feel like this will be something on all the 'first chapter' excerpts i review: DO ...

Seems like your definition of satire's a little skewed. There isn't anything your really pointing out or making fun of (well maybe your indirectly making fun of your immature sense ...