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  • Short Story » Dramatic, Humor Re: The Other Chick

    Ey up, Shiksha. I have to admit that when I saw the title for this my initial reaction was to roll my eyes -- I expected it to fall into ...

    Jun 29, 2014
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense Re: With Revisions: The Deal Will Live

    Ey up, Uniuqe. I feel like what you here right now is an idea, and it's one that could be pretty interesting but there's a lot more that you can ...

    Jun 22, 2014
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Pink Coats and Cottonwood Seeds

    Yo Fortis, you have a good few constructive comments on this already, so I'm gonna try and keep it brief. I like what you've got going here, the image is ...

    Jun 22, 2014
  • Short Story » General, General Re: A Story in Black and White

    Hey ho, Walker! Like dudette, I tihnk the main problem I have here is defining the relationship between the he and the she. Some of the descriptions, the glasses at ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Hunted

    'Ello 'ello! :D It seemed as if Mother Nature knew that something terrible had just happened, and now the world was in mourning. Or perhaps it was just me. You ...

    Nov 28, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Forty Degrees Celsium - Chapter 1

    Hello there, Shinda! The first paragraph of a novel is probably one of the most important, it's the thing that's got to hook us, lure us in to read more, ...

    Nov 27, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Numbers - Ch1

    Hello there, Shinda! Science fiction is my guilty pleasure, and I've decided to indulge myself ;D Some nitpicks and small things, to begin with: not to mention the strange colors; ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Sky is Beautiful

    Hey PSW, it's been a while, no? ;D I think this is pretty interesting, but some of the phrases feel a little... Stilted? As if they're being put in a ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: two crescent moons 1.2

    'Ello Stella! You said you had some great reviews on the first part of this (and so you do!) so I thought I'd mosey on down to this part ;D ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Snow White

    Hi, skintightgenes! I see you're new around these parts, why no pop over to the welcome mat and say hello :D As Leahweird says, short does not equal uninteresting, and ...

    Oct 13, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Just me

    Hey dasiamari! At the moment, this doesn't really read much like a story -- it really does feel a lot like a diary entry. The thing is though, not an ...

    Oct 12, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Practice Makes Perfect

    Hi, Sionarama! Her breathing was rough and shaky as tears streak her chubby cheeks. A small something to begin with, as the story is set in the past tense, that ...

    Oct 12, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: White Carpet

    Hello there, amygabb! It's been a while since I've reviewed anything, so apologies for being out of practice! some bits and pieces to begin with: I crawl along the fence ...

    Oct 11, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Conventions of an Innocent Toilet

    Hi Hayes! It makes me wonder though, do comics that think they’re funny actually sound funny? That would make laughter and jokes a constant drum in their hearts. Supermodels that ...

    Jul 23, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Gypsy

    Hi retrodisco! :D I'm from the same side neck o' the woods as you, so relevant question -- did you catch Channel 4's My Big Fat Gypsy Wedding ? If ...

    Jul 2, 2011


It is only a novel... or, in short, only some work in which the greatest powers of the mind are displayed, in which the most thorough knowledge of human nature, the happiest delineation of its varieties, the liveliest effusions of wit and humour, are conveyed to the world in the best-chosen language
— Jane Austen, Northanger Abbey