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Re: Who Are We Without the Rain?
Hi there, it's tiggpanda145! Well done, I really like your poem and it contains some great descriptions. I especially like 'or maybe it could be the rain that falls from ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: A Stone Man
I like this piece! It is really interesting and carries a very strong message. Especially at the end when you say 'And be an inspiration.' It just reinforces your message ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: The Worm Goblin
Wow! This is a really interesting poem...what inspired you to write this? One thing, I'm guessing you meant 'unearthed' instead of 'uneathed'(probably just a typo). The imagery is good and ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: The Fog
Wow, I cannot criticise this-it is so emotive. I can feel tears in my eyes which is very unusual for me! Thank you for sharing this with me. This story ...
Jun 29, 2013 -
Re: This Lonely World of White
Hello! This poem is great and really effective! It created a really vivid image of this lonely landscape and of the fox. You can tell that you spent time crafting ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: Shattered Heart
Wow! That's really good! You did really well with the rhyming and your spelling and punctuation was good! I can't really think of any improvements! Ooh, probably just a typo ...
Jun 29, 2013 -
Re: World War IV:Chapter One
Hello! I really like the idea-set in the future with a new World War! Awesome! Firstly, in the second sentence I think that there is a repitition of 'face' which ...
Jun 28, 2013 -
Re: Writers Block
I really like this short story thing! It is really accurate-that's exactly how I feel when I can't think of anything to write but I want to! Although you could ...
Jun 27, 2013 -
Re: No Words Left
I liked this poem-I could tell you had put lots of feeling and emotion into it and spent some time on thinking about imagery, your thoughts and feelings and the ...
Jun 26, 2013 -
Re: Release
Interesting poem-deep! I like the way it's quite 'abrupt' and 'sharp' like a razor if you get what I mean. When I read it I said the lines in my ...
Jun 26, 2013 -
Re: My Angel
Well done that's a good poem! Remember to put in capital letters at the right time and vary your punctuation (put commas for flow etc.) and maybe a full-stop at ...
Jun 26, 2013 -
Re: Happy Birthday!
When I saw the title of your poem I was trying to imagine how exactly it would be written; writing a birthday poem it is so easy to do a ...
Jun 25, 2013 -
Re: Penguin Attacks
That's a good poem! The descriptions are very good and give you a sense of place. The idea is very good and you have used lots of ambitous vocabulary too. ...
Jun 25, 2013
