I really thought this was a good poem, and really captured a tender feeling. It was cool how you started everything with "My Angel so beautiful," and even capitalized "Angel." It really makes you think about who this could be. I would, however, shy away from the word "evil." It defines a character too much, and doesn't let the reader draw their own conclusion. Perhaps try a word that implies a shift toward depravity, instead of stating it.
Otherwise, that was all I could find, so nice job! I'll really look forward to reading more of your stuff!
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