tigeraye

You said this was an excerpt from a novel, but listed it under poetry. THEREFORE, I am unsure of how to review this.

i disagree with your suggestions but thank you regardless for your review

thanks for reviewing this. it's interesting to have something i wrote years ago brought to my attention to see how my writing has changed.

Ty

thanks. tbh this isn't one of my favorite poems i've written, there's something i don't like about it that i can't put my finger on. maybe i tried too hard ...

thank you. i don't like capitalization,

thank you for your lovely comments. this isn't to say god doesn't exist, just capturing the briefest moments of doubt i've had over the years

right, i'm not asking you to describe to me more specifically what it is you're talking about, just to use more detail. you can still paint a more vivid picture ...

this is very wonderfully written. it deserves all the likes it's getting

well, i suppose it implies it's still an inn, when you look at it from one angle. but when the only adjective for something is "black", i think "pure black", ...

You're back!! My favorite YWS novel.

one lamb is peaceful, but to me, a thousand lambs is tougher to think about. it's a lot of eyes. something peaceful that isn't peaceful at all is what it ...

thank you, but they're song lyrics, not a poem.

i feel like describing the brothers into more detail would've been against the whole point of the story. thank you for reviewing, though.

thank you