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Hey SunsetTree Katnes again
What I liked
I loved the way you used angels and the pictures you created
1 Flow & Style
Well, this is just me but your first part and the last didn't seem to match somehow. Also are you allowed to use commas in poetry? They appear in the fourth verse when the angel says ''Wipe your eyes . . . Your last verse was really great but once again I am not sure if it fits with the rest of the poem.
2. Grammar & Punctuation
Capitals again! There are no capitals. It may or may not be a style however-It really messes with the flow I think.
3. Visuals & Drafting
Some poems are drafted the way you did yours and that is a style but, maybe consider redrafting
4. Verbs & Adjectives
This is totaly just me you can choose to ignore this-I think you could use more colorful adjectives to create a stronger vibe of feeling particulerly with the angel
4. Overall and Encouragement
Good job! I really loved it. It was very touching somehow. Keep up writing such good and godly stuff.
Katnes out
i disagree with your suggestions but thank you regardless for your review
Of course.
Peiji here for a review! Hope you’re having a good day! Or night. Or evening. Or afternoon. Or whenever you’re reading this.
Anyway, I love this poem so much! I can’t even express the emotions this poem made me feel. Even though I’m not very religious, I really love the idea of an afterlife, and that the ones we love and lost are still watching over us. I love that each stanza has a different tone and feeling to it, yet all of them connect to each other. I also really love the images you were able to conjure in my mind with your writing.
The only thing that could be considered an error is your capitalization, but it’s clearly a stylistic choice, and one that contributed to the overall feeling of the poem, so don’t change it.
Sorry, I realize this is less of a review and more of me talking about how much I love this, but even if it doesn’t help, I hope it at least makes you smile. Thanks for writing this beautiful poem!
This is really touching. I like it!
Ty