I loved everything about this. Unlike a fellow reviewer, I really enjoyed the title, I just wanted to throw that out before getting too far into this. It's just a personal preference thing. The whole poem really channels what you feel directly to the audience, but it especially hit me the second time you write, "oh why is youth so wasted on the young." I also particularly loved, "I would be carrying your ashes/ just as you wanted/ fifty or sixty years from now." It's a simple line on the surface, not overplayed or drawn out, but all the more powerful for it. The emotion of this piece stands for itself, without a need for super elevated language or other distracting lyrical "tools." The way you express yourself in this is truly masterful. I hope writing it was cathartic, because reading it certainly was.
Points: 4120
Reviews: 83
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