tigeraye

He’s holding an armful of produce the first time she sees him "Produce" isn't really striking imagery for me. To really capture, I would really use a more explicit term, ...

Now this I really liked. You had me hooked from the start, and just like your other stories I've read I really loved the sense of mystery you insert the ...

I really like the passion that shines through your writing. There's a nice level of emotion, that shows me you're not afraid to really get involved into a story. While ...

Right away, I can say that I like the title. Simple, but a lot of imagery. It's a really nice choice. (Disclaimer: Vague and cliffhanger ending ahead). So well, please ...

Skimming through the green room for works to review, yours caught my eye just because of the uniqueness of the title and the strangeness of the genre -- fantasy and ...

I'm sort of skipping around in chapters a good lot, but I want to say that I like the narration here. You really make the reader feel not that they're ...

Hm, this is interesting. I really like your voice for narration, it has a certain uniqueness to it. I've never played Overwatch, but the plot seems pretty intriguing. I'm definitely ...

I like the dialogue here, for the most part I find it authentic and easy to follow. I like how you include a small amount of detail to make each ...

Wow, poor Vajrasha :( I'd imagine the rape scene must've been incredibly daunting to write, not just because of the subject itself but because of how fast the pace quickens ...

This is really fascinating...if I didn't sympathize with Ben last chapter, this time I definitely do, even if he's still making irresponsible decisions like talking on the phone while driving. ...

I thought the dialogue here was surprisingly good. It seems like you've nailed how to make your characters feel realistic...I didn't have any trouble picturing what Ben and Ruby look ...

This seems to be a writing based purely on imagery, which is fine by me, because I actually like those pieces. The thing you want to accomplish with imagery pieces, ...

Another really good chapter. The continued intensity you manage to keep is incredible, never really a dull moment. From the rush and excitement of Do'amha's fight with the troll, the ...

I think this was your strongest section so far. I wasn't expecting Karliah to be the woman Do'amha helped at all, and her presence makes the story incredibly interesting. Then ...

I have to say that I haven't seen anything so unique as your series ever posted here. The concept is amusing, because at first it seemed like this was going ...