tigeraye

Dolls. Pictures. Clothes. Toys. All of Lex's favorite things stuffed in one tiny cardboard box. I don't think it's enough room for her larger-than-life personality. Lex was the sweetest, kindest ...

I was in fifth grade when I realized something. A lot of people don't enjoy reading. This is great use of italicization. Just look at the difference between "A lot ...

The night was ink-black when Maiven gently crept from her bed, gave the lump of blankets that hid her brother a quick kiss, and stepped outside. The cool night air ...

This is really poetic. You have a neat "voice" - as in the narration here is blunt, head-on yet vague at the same time. You took a simple idea of ...

I recognize that voice. Every time, it’s always that same voice that drags me out of my black room. That’s right. I remember now. I would’ve almost preferred drowning. But ...

It started with a wolf whistle. I never thought it’d happen to me. I didn’t think much of it—thought it was plainly my imagination or, perhaps, the humid heat of ...

Haha, I like this. It's like telling someone to notice their own breathing, and then they notice their own breathing. I would try to make it a bit more concise ...

This is a pretty funny generalization of how most third graders act and think. Bluntly, the boy is made out to be dumb, egotistical and smug. The only part I ...

There are kind of a bunch of grammar/styling mistakes here. Last night I had a dream the day the world was to end me and all my church members were ...

If you are looking for a story, then just turn and walk away. This is hardly a story, hardly fantastical, hardly even entertaining. It is reality. Harsh; cruel; and untrustworthy. ...

I like the meaning behind this. There a couple of grammatical mistakes (an awkward second sentence, the last sentence is way too long and needs some commas), but the whole ...

Hahaha, nice story bud. The twist at the end was really funny, I thought you were going to do the old "It was all just a dream" shtick, but then ...

This is a really strong start to a story. The first paragraph is a really powerful bit that sets the not quite nostalgic, but almost melodic mood for the rest ...

This is sort of difficult to read, but you've been criticized enough on your grammar so I'll comment on the story. The girl complains about not being able to find ...

Cool, upbeat slice of life story. It wasn't what I expected from the title and first paragraph (expected a story about the evils of college bookstore prices) but it was ...