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Nice little simple piece. I feel like.. It needs more. It's good so far; but you need to build on it. My favorite line was: But you must go as ...

Issues: My mind was unwavering, my jaw set Ths line sounds.. overused. Perhaps it could be something more like My mind was set, my jaw clenched, or hardened. It just ...

These were certainly original. They were great overall. No suggestions.. Uhm... the only thing I had issues with was the beat. Sometime it seemed kind of off although mainly it ...

Sweet short poem :) Uhmm,, I think that as you grow as a writer you may want to add more to this and expand. then u cud post it again? ...

Hmm.. not much to say on this. Although I strongly appose on the idea of Harry and Hermione and believe soley in Hermione and Ron and Harry and Ginny, it ...

I liked it. The ryhthm was very unpredictable and hard to detect. I was surprised by what was coming. It flowed overally well and the lines were very emotionally striking. ...

This is gorgeous. BTW, watch out for Vernon. He may be a long time member but he's a real jerk.. I hope he doesn't read this.. Unfortunately he was the ...

This was just amazing. I mean, for the first time, I'm at a loss for words. Hmm... it had the real true street vibe to it and I oculd tell ...

You're chapters just seem to get better and better.. But I can't help but wonder how much of this is written from personal experience? It's amazing writing. I've already expressed ...

Hmmh.. this chapter was much more sensual than the first one. I felt a bit of the sexuality issue in the first chapter but here it really heated up. I ...

Very good, nice exciting piece of writing here. =D Again, I sensed true connection by some of the names and by the way you act. Ahah, I guess I know ...

First off *smacks you* never ever ever ever say you're horrible at anything. I would never consider ay piece of poetry "horrible" as long as it wasn't plagurized or fake; ...

I feel truth behind it. I hate reading something and knowing it's completely fake and that it in fact doesn't stem from experience at all. This didn't have that. I ...

It's actually very good. Some lines really stood out for me but I won't get into that. The ryhming didn't seem forced, which is great. The only problem I have ...

It's beautiful. I felt your emotions come over me so strongly. I conncted to your ryhmes and lines. Hmm... some poeple say they don't consider this poetry but I do. ...