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I agree greatly with Sakura. The title is a little bit plain. Even the name of the main character is sort of a cliche if you've ever heard of or ...

Hey RandomGrrl! I believe we've met before haha. :) Hypocrite You know something I can't stand? When pig-nosed hypocrites make faces at the wide world, stick thier tongues out, roll ...

Hey! Okay, so for my crits I usually copy out the whole piece and give my little comments in bold. I’m going to scream as loud as I can...But you ...

This is absolutely fascinating. It seems like you've fully shaped the persona of the bad kid in every teenager. True, some are worse than others. And it is true again ...

Sweet ending! I mean sweet in the slang term for good, not that the ending was literally sweet haha. Sometimes it's hard to tell what I mean online xD. Anyways, ...

You are definitley a poet, never say you're not. You know, I have encountered you on YWS many times and each and every time I ask you to review something, ...

Black lace gloves A face so pale Radiant clothes High-heeled shoes [this line didn't flow either for me something like "strapless shoes" might though] Spotlights shining Strut down the runway ...

Hello! I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece. It was beautiful, the whole idea of living in a glass castle and then suddenly it all came tumbling down. I ...

This is so much better! I absolutely love it now! Great job, this is at your level. I'm proud. See what I mean? A little bit more ffort and editing ...

I find it hard to move around. I find myself constantly looking over my shoulder. I find this situation to be unbearable. [WHOAA, you nearly bored me to death here, ...

Hi! It's me ta-mara on my real account. I finally remembered the password!! HAZZAH! :) Anyways, you asked me to review this so here goes: I believe realized is spelled ...

It starts with a smile Then grows to a kiss Traveling miles, To feel true bliss. People fantasize, Of rare true love That never dies That’s strongly wove. People fantasize, ...

Hello! I'm Tamara. How are you today? Well, I'm here to review your piece so here goes: Northern star, You’re so bright. You sit afar, [SOme might consider this ryhme ...

I love: "Also, teenagers who get pregnant are usually put into the “slut” category" If you’re thinking of getting an abortion, just remember this: “A person is a person, no ...

There isnt much to say except: Bloody gorgeous. If I get another one like this out of your I swear to god ill burst. You're amazing.. I am just so ...