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  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Horror Re: Ghosts

    Hey, so most of this is my opinion so feel free to ignore me. I usually believe that starting a work with dialogue is a no-no but after seeing it ...

    May 5, 2017
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, General Re: Catching the Silence.

    Hey, so this is kind of a review but feel free to just regard (or disregard) this as just my personal opinions. The fast GOT-TO-GET-OUT-OF-HERE vibe/pace probably would have been ...

    Apr 28, 2017
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Foster

    Hey, I have a bit of a review, but most is praise. This is a masterpiece. First paragraph is great! Amazing introduction into a story, got me hooked right away ...

    Apr 21, 2017
  • Short Story » Health, Realistic Re: The Other Side

    Okay, here we go. This could be interpreted as my personal opinion, but here's my review. Sorry it's long-ish. So first, for the story as a whole, there is a ...

    Apr 19, 2017
  • Short Story » Horror, Supernatural Re: Missing

    Okay, this is long, and more of my experience than a review. Creepy. You did a great job unnerving me. In the first few paragraphs I was actually nervous. The ...

    Apr 14, 2017
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Theatre Re: Light Boy- Part 1

    Okay. Here we go. Sorry it's a bit long. The same thing happens to me when I copy and paste one of my works here. The little icons like the ...

    Apr 7, 2017
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Other Re: The Epping Forest

    Hey! So, I really did enjoy this piece A LOT, but my head isn't really in the right place to fully enjoy it. I am always so distracted. But here ...

    Nov 8, 2016
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Supernatural Re: Burning Rocks

    Guten Aben! I liked the beginning. Like Remy, I laughed inwardly at the family that tried to take everything they owned with them as they ran from the fire. As ...

    Nov 6, 2016
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Horror Re: Just the start

    Okay, this is nice so far. To me the girl is a character I want bad things to happen to, I don't know if you intended this or I am ...

    Oct 18, 2016
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Narrative Re: Forest

    You did very well building up that suspense. Overall it was well written. Captivating, much enjoyed by people with my imagination. Started simple but mysterious. I didn't get that the ...

    Oct 13, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: evidently i am a questionable spectacle

    I like this because I feel like I am that person, this is someone I relate to, once in a while. And it is my favourite kind of poem, the ...

    Oct 11, 2016
  • Short Story » Lyrical, Spiritual Re: The Epic of James - First Half

    I. AM. AMAZED! I have nothing to say critique wise. Like literally! All I can give is my praise! So, content wise, this is so interesting. And you spin the ...

    Oct 1, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Teen Fiction Re: Grandayria: Dawn of Heroes - Chapter 1

    Okay, content wise, starting off very ordinary leaves anticipation as to what is it that makes these characters so important to write about, and is a wonderful mystery if you ...

    Oct 1, 2016
  • Script » Humor, Teen Fiction Re: Friends?: Scene One (Edit version)

    This is adorable. I like May, her being so painfully shy is relatable to me, honestly. But I don't try to make friends, she's desperate for some. I think it's ...

    Sep 30, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: Because Of You

    Easy read. Cute. I can relate to it. It's somewhere I've been before. Actually I think I lot of people have been here before. So it is very generic. But ...

    Sep 27, 2016


Remember: the plot is nothing more than footprints left in the snow after your characters have run by on their way to incredible destinations.
— Ray Bradbury