thehotinpsychotic

hey, thehotinpsychotic here to review!! First thing is nitpicky, but around this one area of a story there seems to be a lot of sentences about the same length that ...

Hello, thehotinpsychotic here to review! First comes nitpicky errors. "She didn't feel alive right now." 'didn't' implies that you're using past tense, but 'right now' is a present tense phrase. ...

I enjoyed this quite a bit. There's really clever analogies relating our lives to a newspaper. I don't really have any suggestions, but I just really enjoyed the parts where ...

I liked this quite a bit! Just like everyone else, I was caught off guard by the title. I really like how you tied the ending back to the beginning. ...

Hello, thehotinpsychotic is here to review! First comes critique. I understand that the character is supposed to be narcissistic, but you shouldn't put into writing that a girl is a ...

Hello, thehotinspsychotic here to review! I'm going to start off with the smaller errors/critique! "The calm lapping sound of the sea.... the salty breeze and warmth from the sand calming ...

Hello, thehotinpsychotic is here to review! The general story idea wasn't so bad, but I believe that it wasn't executed properly. The story has little flow to it; I couldn't ...

Hey IronSpark, thehotinpsychotic is here to review! I enjoyed this poem a lot; I like how it shows the multiple ways that your heart is depending on what situations it ...

Hello, heavymetal247, thehotinpsychotic is here to review! I really overall liked this story; it was powerful and detailed for only a paragraph. It was told in a gloomy and chilling ...

hey, thehotinpsychotic here to review! As far as grammar and structure goes, this poem was impeccable. And for content, I found that enjoyable as well. Maybe it's just me, but ...

Hey, thehotinpsychotic here to review! As a feminist, I had to read the ideal in poetry form! Really there's no grammar mistakes, but the only thing is that the periods ...

Hey, thehotinpsychotic here to review! I read this because this is one of my favorite tales in Greek mythology. Some grammar nitpicks: “Icarus? Is that you?” He exclaimed. Exclaimed is ...

Hey, thehotinpsychotic here to review! This was absolutely beautiful! You made me cry, missy! I love how it goes through the stages of life. I also love the line "It ...

Hey, thehotinpsychotic here to review! I love Doctor Who. So of course I had to read this. I liked this generally, and you did a good job of telling the ...

Hey, thehotinpsychotic here to review! I liked this generally, and really only have one problem with it. I found myself going back to read what the questions were when reading ...