User avatar

thehobbitgangster

  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Threadbare

    Hey, so this seems like a good sort of ballad type of song. I haven't heard the song by the Fray, but the lyrics on their own could be cool ...

    Nov 20, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: "Emily" (Dickinson)

    Hey, I thought this was really well done. The melody you put to the words was really pretty and worked very well. The word choices were powerful and I think ...

    Sep 18, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: YWS (parody of Y.M.C.A)

    Firstly, this is a great song!!! Anywho down to some reviewing... As people have said before me there are a few places that are out of rhythm due to either ...

    Aug 25, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Let The Hell Begin

    Hello there! So, the way the lines are so short I can almost see this as a rap with the chorus being sung, but that's just the way I interpreted ...

    Aug 8, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: me without you

    Hey! So, just a few things. The line "I'm been trying to breath, but I'm fighting for air" should be "I'm trying to breathE, but I'm fighting for air". The ...

    Aug 4, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Smile Kid

    These were sweet lyrics with a really cute message, but weren't overly sappy or anything like that. The formatting was perfect and I really liked how you introduced two separate ...

    Aug 2, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Better off this way

    Firstly, is this a poem or lyrics? It doesn't show typical song stuff (chorus, bridge, verse, etc.) besides having verses. Other than that, it keeps a consistent rhyme scheme, although ...

    Aug 1, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: "Roller-Coaster" (A Dynamite by Taio Cruz PARODY)

    Hey! This was a really fantastic parody! I love this song and I think that the concept went with it very well. Any who, a couple of things... The line ...

    Aug 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Rice Crispies

    This was a really sweet poem. I actually liked the last line because I thought it was funny. I didn't know if you were trying to be serious or making ...

    Jul 28, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: I accidentally started caring

    Hello there! Firstly, these lyrics work very well. I can imagine them to a pop ballad, maybe even with a little country twang. I just have a couple nit-picky type ...

    Jul 28, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Party Like A Zombie

    This poem was a lot different than I expected from the title. I was suspecting dark and scary, but was pleasantly surprised with whimsical and nice. It was very imaginative ...

    Jul 26, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Awful Fury

    So, I had to read through this poem a couple times because there was so much in it. It confused me at first, but I think I got it in ...

    Jul 25, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Horizon

    Hola! I agree that this poem does get a bit lengthy especially at the end. So, the second line of the poem seemed a little awkwardly worded to me. To ...

    Jul 25, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: They're all Killing Me...

    Hola! So I do believe you chose a very appropriate genre for this song. The whole goth ballad idea works well with the lyrics and their tone. Anyways, firstly I ...

    Jul 25, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Keyboards

    Hello there! My first thought on this piece was that it seemed to be more of a poem rather than song lyrics. It just seems a little short is all ...

    Jul 20, 2010


Owning our story can be hard but not nearly as difficult as spending our lives running from it. Embracing our vulnerabilities is risky but not nearly as dangerous as giving up on love and belonging and joy—the experiences that make us the most vulnerable. Only when we are brave enough to explore the darkness will we discover the infinite power of our light.
— Brené Brown