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Re: Threadbare
Hey, so this seems like a good sort of ballad type of song. I haven't heard the song by the Fray, but the lyrics on their own could be cool ...
Nov 20, 2010 -
Re: "Emily" (Dickinson)
Hey, I thought this was really well done. The melody you put to the words was really pretty and worked very well. The word choices were powerful and I think ...
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: YWS (parody of Y.M.C.A)
Firstly, this is a great song!!! Anywho down to some reviewing... As people have said before me there are a few places that are out of rhythm due to either ...
Aug 25, 2010 -
Re: Let The Hell Begin
Hello there! So, the way the lines are so short I can almost see this as a rap with the chorus being sung, but that's just the way I interpreted ...
Aug 8, 2010 -
Re: me without you
Hey! So, just a few things. The line "I'm been trying to breath, but I'm fighting for air" should be "I'm trying to breathE, but I'm fighting for air". The ...
Aug 4, 2010 -
Re: Smile Kid
These were sweet lyrics with a really cute message, but weren't overly sappy or anything like that. The formatting was perfect and I really liked how you introduced two separate ...
Aug 2, 2010 -
Re: Better off this way
Firstly, is this a poem or lyrics? It doesn't show typical song stuff (chorus, bridge, verse, etc.) besides having verses. Other than that, it keeps a consistent rhyme scheme, although ...
Aug 1, 2010 -
Re: "Roller-Coaster" (A Dynamite by Taio Cruz PARODY)
Hey! This was a really fantastic parody! I love this song and I think that the concept went with it very well. Any who, a couple of things... The line ...
Aug 1, 2010 -
Re: Rice Crispies
This was a really sweet poem. I actually liked the last line because I thought it was funny. I didn't know if you were trying to be serious or making ...
Jul 28, 2010 -
Re: I accidentally started caring
Hello there! Firstly, these lyrics work very well. I can imagine them to a pop ballad, maybe even with a little country twang. I just have a couple nit-picky type ...
Jul 28, 2010 -
Re: Party Like A Zombie
This poem was a lot different than I expected from the title. I was suspecting dark and scary, but was pleasantly surprised with whimsical and nice. It was very imaginative ...
Jul 26, 2010 -
Re: Awful Fury
So, I had to read through this poem a couple times because there was so much in it. It confused me at first, but I think I got it in ...
Jul 25, 2010 -
Re: Horizon
Hola! I agree that this poem does get a bit lengthy especially at the end. So, the second line of the poem seemed a little awkwardly worded to me. To ...
Jul 25, 2010 -
Re: They're all Killing Me...
Hola! So I do believe you chose a very appropriate genre for this song. The whole goth ballad idea works well with the lyrics and their tone. Anyways, firstly I ...
Jul 25, 2010 -
Re: Keyboards
Hello there! My first thought on this piece was that it seemed to be more of a poem rather than song lyrics. It just seems a little short is all ...
Jul 20, 2010
