Published June 19, 2010
She’s trying to be cool, trying to fit in
Trying to be confident all the time
But she has these moments when she cries
And feels like she’s surrounded by lies
Come on, let’s be a sunshine girl
Oh, oh, you just gotta stay lovely
When it feels like the day is night
Just know everything’s gonna be all right
Chorus:
Well, smile kid
I’ll be there for you
Always have, always will
Any time you feel alone
Smile kid, give me a call
And I’ll try to brighten your world
Every day, he tries to be glad
Even though everything feels upside down
The sun went away, his heart broke in two
And now he’s unsure about what to do
Come on, let’s be a sunshine boy
Oh, oh, you just gotta stay positive
Through all the pain, and all the fear
There’s a message you need to hear
Chorus:
Well, smile kid
I’ll be there for you
Always have, always will
Any time you feel alone
Smile kid, give me a call
And I’ll try to brighten your world
Bridge:
I’ll help you conquer your fears
I’ll wipe away all the tears
Let’s face the world today
Even if the sky is sad and gray
It’s all right, it’s all right
It will be over someday
Chorus:
Well, smile kid
I’ll be there for you
Always have, always will
Any time you feel alone
Smile kid, give me a call
And I’ll try to brighten your world
Go ahead, live in the present
Every day is an event
Don’t worry too much now
Take it sweet, take it slow
And just smile…
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These were sweet lyrics with a really cute message, but weren't overly sappy or anything like that. The formatting was perfect and I really liked how you introduced two separate characters, but kept them with a common theme with the sunshine girl/sunshine boy bit. My favorite bit was the very last stanza that started with "Go ahead..." to the end. It really summed up the whole song perfectly. Overall really really good job! It made me smile.
Hello there!
I find this really interesting and a very heartwarming song. I like the message behind it and this is good to be a song. You should definitely try to sing with it! The chorus part really stands out well, and that is my favorite part. I have nothing to nitpick about or something, because I think in my opinion, I think I like this. Spellings and how you rhyme this are thumbs up.
Keep writing!
Peace out!
~yuri
WHOA!!! that was awesome!!! you have some real talent. if you, like, record yourself singing this and put it on youtube or something, send me the link so i can listen to it! the chorus was definately the best bit, just like it's supposed to be in a song
i don't have anything negative to say... so good work!!
-fighta