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Re: Don't Trust the Damsels
Hi! i really liked this short story, so orginal and written perfectly to get your message across. I do have one thing to say though: do you plan on continuing ...
May 1, 2014 -
Re: Chess: the art of war.
hi! I loved this piece! The covabulary you chose to use throughout your writing I think really makes it what it is. I love how it's sort of old language ...
May 1, 2014 -
Re: The 2020 War Chapter 1: The Letter
hi! I really like where this story is going and I'm happy you chose to re-look at it because now tha you're older you're probably moe experienced and can make ...
May 1, 2014 -
Re: Holes
Hey! The title immediately drew me in, being a Passenger fan (it's the title of a song) >D I think this is actually a great piece of poetry, love the ...
Apr 20, 2014 -
Re: Life or Death ~Chapter 4- Infiltration
Hi! Before I start I just want to add how I am just starting here, I (stupidly, I might add, as it was in the title) didn't realize this is ...
Apr 20, 2014 -
Re: The Man .1 // The Second Kid .2
Hi! Wow, this was written exeptionally well, applause to you my friend! I have a couple of questions about what you wrote, parts of it I found were a bit ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Adrien In The Poppy Field [Rewrite]
Hi! First of all I want to say I love the start! You begin describing such a sweet picture with the birds singing, blue skies, etc, everything which suggests a ...
Feb 15, 2014 -
Re: Gott Mit Uns: May 21st 18XX
Hi! I'm going to start off my saying that I truly love your writing. You have great, short descriptions which enable an image inside the reader's mind while at the ...
Feb 15, 2014 -
Re: Unrequited
"Awww" is all that comes to mind right now... :"( That was so beautifully written, I truly mean it. No sappy, long, descriptions, just enough to get a taste of ...
Feb 15, 2014 -
Re: REMOVED...
Hi, thegirlwhowrites here for a review! Interesting story, I have to say I wasn't sure where you were going with this, if it was a personal diary entry or what ...
Feb 15, 2014 -
Re: A Murderer?
OOOOh cool I liked this! And it's not ususal for me to like these kiind of stories so I congratulate you for that ;) Lately I've been having a 'thing' ...
Feb 15, 2014 -
Re: Where I Belonged
Hi! Thegirlwhowrites here for a review! :D I have to say I really did love your piece... Beautifully written, great amount of detail, now all I need is to hear ...
Feb 14, 2014 -
Re: Daylight
Hello! Cute short story, you've put so much feeling in such a short piece and for that I applaude you :) However, for the reader to feel more connected to ...
Feb 1, 2014 -
Re: Sunshine
Hi, welcome to YWS! Cute poem! I would suggest next time not to use too much of the itallic, cursive fonts and capitalizing words just because it's more effective when ...
Jan 14, 2014 -
Re: IJI the Lone Wolf
Hi! Welcome to YWS! Cute story. I liked reading it. I noticed that maybe you should try reading it in your head or out loud, because there are several occasions ...
Jan 10, 2014
