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Hey there! Reading this came to great difficulty as there isn’t much of a structure to it which also stopped the piece from flowing as well as it should. The ...

Hey there! At times this piece could be a little confusing and I had to go back and make sense of it myself, however it was beautifully written and quite ...

Hey! This is truly great I can not wait for the next chapter! I haven't read much fantasy in recent months on here, but from looking around this story is ...

Howdy there! I think this is really good and cleverly written! Just a few nitpicks In my opinion never start a sentence with 'and'. Just my opinion but it weakens ...

Howdy there! Just one thing I'll say if you are going to use punctuation don't just put comma's in, you need full stops. There is a huge difference in the ...

Howdy there! I think this is really good! Nice and simple! Good idea and you haven't made it complex for yourself! Very cute to be honest. I love the layout, ...

Howdy there! Just a few nitpicks. One thing I will say is, it is all one big paragraph, that is a lot to take for the readers so I would ...

Howdy there! I think this is really good, just a few nitpicks though. I think you could use better words, try using a thesaurus? I am touched and kissed This ...

Howdy there! I also agree with your view! I was watching Friends earlier today and one of the main characters entered her child for a baby pageant. I think it's ...

Howdy there! This is a really good poem; I really like it! The words you have used are as well, very beautiful! I love the layout it stands out and ...

Howdy there! This is really good. Just one thing I'd say is you've put in one comma throughout the whole of your poem and no full stops. As a reader ...

Howdy there! Wow. This is really heart felt. I love your use of enjambment to help the flow. Just a couple of things though. 1) You may want to use ...

Howdy there! Just a few nitpicks I think you mean doctor. Also, do you have brain surgery to cure blindness? I called my eye docotr and told him that I ...

Howdy there! I think this is pretty good but some of the rhyming sounds forced. Although you may feel more comfortable doing a rhyming poem it isn't necessary and in ...

Howdy there! I think this is fabulously written and your topic is very specific which is very good for lyrics. I think it is one, surprisingly that many people will ...