An Introduction

by emoticon220

Published June 17, 2011

In Poems

Welcome to my writing.
Welcome to my mind.

Welcome to my creation.
Welcome to my heart.

Welcome to my hopes.
Welcome to my dreams.

Welcome to the craze.
Welcome to the ideas.

Welcome to the laughs.
Welcome to the pleas.

And finally, welcome to a friend.

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Cailey
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Cailey commented Comment · Jul 31, 2011

I don't have a review, but I had to say something! This was interesting and exciting. I just wanted to say good job. :)

SteviexOctopus wrote a review Review · Jun 17, 2011

Hey, it's Stevie here from the Red Ink Emporium. I've got your review fresh off the press for you right here:

I love the feel you give off with this poem, I could definitely see it being a motto for a writing website or at the beginning of a novel about a writer. :]

I don't have that much to say about the structure but maybe this line:

Welcome to the world I create.

Would read better as "Welcome to my creation"? Just because you start out with a nice welcome to my [blank] then you move to welcome to the [blank]. Just to keep with the flow.

Also you probably could omit the "And finally" from the last line. Overall, it is a nice poem!

Keep writing and thank you for choosing Red Ink Emporium for all your reviewing needs. :]

thegilliangill wrote a review Review · Jun 17, 2011

Howdy there!

I think this is really good! Nice and simple! Good idea and you haven't made it complex for yourself! Very cute to be honest.

I love the layout, too many people these days bunch up their literature and don't break it down, it makes it harder for the reader to understand, and it makes it complicated!

just a few nitpicks though.

I think this line stops the flow of the poem just a little as it is longer and generates more syllables.

Welcome to the world I create.


I don't think the 'W' in welcome needs to be capitalized!
And finally, Welcome to a friend.


Overall really nice poem, well done!

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tgirly
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tgirly commented Comment · Jun 17, 2011

I think it would flow better if instead of Welcome to the ideas, it was just Welcome to ideas. It makes more sense the way you wrote it, though, so maybe you want to keep it like that. Nice poem, short, simple, and relatable.



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