thefireinmeisJC

Hehe!! Thank you, that some one else in the world hates twilight... I think it was an interesting poem despite other people's saying it isn't actually a poem. Which I ...

Maybe this is just me, but what exactly are you trying to convey here? I like the poem, maybe it could be a little longer?, but I didn't truly get ...

*Sorry* same verdict as Part I. It was great though somehow you need to make the beginning paragraph about sleep a little more interesting. I completely skimmed over it to ...

hello, Its interesting though the main problem is that the syllables don't match up. There's no flow to the poem. Just a bunch of words about snow falling...which is ok ...

WOW. i know this forum is for constructive criticsm but i'm afraid i can't give any. Your rhyming was right, and flow was awesome...I like how all the syllables match ...

Ooh. This was interesting! The first few lines were a little hard to understand but once I realized it was about suicide I became *interested* in it (if that makes ...

Sorry, I'm going to have to agree with Jiggity. Nice poem, good flow, and grammar etc but you really didn't "express" anything here. And it kind of contradicts itself. First ...

first of all, thanks for the critique on my work :D I'm *sad* to say that I can't do the same to yours. I usually have trouble reading someone's elses ...

Awesome poem. I think it needs to flow better though. And capitalize though I must say I am not a grammar freak (I just started a sentence with "And"). You ...

wow. I'm new here so this is the first peice I've seen that you've written. :D I didn't think it was boring at all actually. I do agree, sometimes the ...

I think it is really good! I like how it makes you really want to read more. She had so much potential, and, if there was one thing I knew ...

ok. you need to get rid of all "..." or elipses in plain english. i don't mind stories where in the beginning, you have no idea what is happening but ...