thedelphinater

This was good. I thought it was more of a short story than a script, though, since there weren't any sort of stage directions, and it was told from the ...

This was good, especially for your first try at poetry. I thought you relayed the message fairly clearly, though I might have used a bit more imagery, which is hard ...

This was very good. I couldn't find anything that I would fix, and I thought that this was a good first chapter. You introduced the reader to the narrator's life ...

This is good, but needs a little work. First thing I noticed was the rhythm/flow. The poem seemed very choppy to me, and I couldn't really figure out what the ...

I must say, I'm rather shocked about some of the books people hate (Slaughter-House Five, To Kill a Mockingbird, His Dark Materials, Animal Farm, Lord of the Flies). And then ...

OK seriously, you're poetry is really taking a toll on my self-esteem. Can't you make a mistake just once? Something other than just one line not being capitalized at the ...

Hola mi amigo! It's review time! This poem was awesome. The flow and rhyme scheme and all that were good. Except for a few little nit-picks, I couldn't find anything ...

Hi! This was amazing! Like, I'm not just saying that. This was really good. Just one little nit-pick though: I watch over the fighting army They all work in harmony ...

Hi there! Ok, I couldn't find anything wrong with the flow, the spelling, the French-y-ness, and so forth. Here's my suggestion for punctuation and such: It’s so hard to believe ...

Nit-picks first: I just [b]couldn't seem Random [b]. to make the wotds come out right Words, not words. Your punctuation needs work. You have it, but you need more. All ...

I agree, this needs work. Add capitalization, fix some of the punctuation, find a flow, and get the tenses/ending right, and then I'll critique. Even though you can post things ...

I liked this, it was good. The ending was a bit dark, but I don't care about that sort of stuff. A few little things though. First of all, where's ...

I didn't really get this either. You used pretty words and such, but it didn't really make any sense. Like throwing together a bunch of foreign words to try and ...

This was good. I liked the last stanza the best, and I can certainly relate. A few little things though. it is the only thing that reminds it of what ...

This was good. So far as your description of the image goes, you did an amazing job. You also did a wonderful job of creating a sort of story behind ...