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It's interesting, but confusing because of all the grammer and spelling errors. The beginning didn't hook me, but that might have been because of the spelling errors. It's a good ...

Ain't ain't a word.

PM me when you know what the message says, I can't wait to find out. Really good writing, I didn't see any spelling errors or grammer mistakes when I read ...

It's interesting, though a little difficult to follow because it hops around a little. Can't wait to read the first chapter :)

I like it a lot, but I don't know how well a college would like it. I don't know that much about college, though, so maybe they would. I REALLY ...

I like the way you use commas, you're right, they aren't meant strictly for grammatical use in poetry. Nice poem. i really liked the last stanza the best, it's realistic ...

Thanks, I entered it in Best Villian.

You should remember to capitalize the first letter of each line and not just the first letter of each stanza. I liked the mood of the poem and I liked ...

I think it would flow better if instead of Welcome to the ideas, it was just Welcome to ideas. It makes more sense the way you wrote it, though, so ...

It's an interesting poem, I think it's a little too deep to be about fruit, though. And, umm, you're not a peach. So... I don't know, maybe I''m just not ...

My favorite line is Stare into the mirror and wonder what I'd look like if I were a cartoon character. It was a nice, light, funny poem that wasn't too ...

Good job, usually new members have tons of grammatical and spelling errors, but I didn't see any in this. Welcome to YWS. Good luck! :)

I love it. I agree, the last paragraph was the most awesome.

You spelled prologue wrong in the first sentence. And now you've got me spelling it wrong, I had to retype it like four times. I feel like this could easily ...

I like it too. Maybe, I'd find a different word instead of neat. But that's my opinion.