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tennishead

  • Short Story » Humor, General Re: Where Are My Keys

    Hey Tennishead here, I really enjoyed your story. Your beginning was excellent and you immediately put the reader on the scene instead of taking a paragraph or two to introduce. ...

    May 17, 2015
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Narrative Re: Sea Foam

    Hi, Tennishead here, Wow! This story is deep and dark! The overtones are there from the start and I was really enthralled by the concepts and emotions that the girl ...

    May 17, 2015
  • Short Story » Narrative, Horror Re: Just One Yesterday

    Hey, Tennishead here, I enjoyed this story. I especially found that this part resonated with me, There’s no going back… stopping won’t change anything…the world around you is only going ...

    May 17, 2015
  • Short Story » Narrative, Other Re: Diablo

    Hi Tennishead here, I liked your story. You described Diablo really well and I got an impression of a fierce, vicious and evil competitor who would stop at nothing to ...

    Apr 26, 2015
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Twin Blades Chapter 6 Statis Bomb

    Hi Tennishead here, I agree with CandyWizard, your punctuation needs a fair bit of work. It doesn't just look bad, it affects how the reader perceives the story. For instance, ...

    Apr 26, 2015
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Supernatural Re: Fly

    Hi Tennishead here, I really liked your story predominately how it was written. You had me captured in the story right from the beginning. The imagery was great and I ...

    Apr 4, 2015
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Other Re: Betrayal

    This story really set my imagination into overdrive! It felt like I was a spectator of the battle and the detail that you put into the imagery and the plot ...

    Apr 1, 2015
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Horror Re: Vardøger

    G'day I found this short story pretty cool. I liked the twist about the father too! But I just found a few things that could do with some fine tweaking. ...

    Mar 9, 2015
  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic Re: The Rose and the Sea

    I found this quite an interesting read! What inspired you to write this? At the start, I had this image of an old widow who was reflecting on her past. ...

    Mar 9, 2015
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Chasing Winter

    I thought this was a great story. The imagery in your story was fantastic! Throughout the piece, I was "there." It felt like I was transported into the forest. The ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Short Story » Politics, Historical Fiction Re: The Trials

    I'm going to launch straight into this, 1: Okay, so your grammar needs a bit of work. During the piece, there are many cases where you have lower capital I's, ...

    Mar 8, 2015


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