tanith14

As the other two reviews have said, I think this is a bloody brilliant idea. I think it needs to be expanded on in order to be a great piece. ...

Your key has locked My heart; Padlocked Now yours to tear apart. Unreachable by me For I am yours Unwillingly. And your cruel hands Force me to smile My mindlessness ...

Cheers! I really liked this piece, but there are a few things I would change up. You currently have too many words, which makes the piece very choppy Here's how ...

:shock: Well I'm officially sad! And I was having such a good day too! :cry: I guess that is what you were looking for though...

The above poster basically said everything I wanted to say, so I will leave it at this: don't be discouraged. Writing takes patience and experience. You mustn't get offended and ...

It overcomes me like a sun-washed Himalayan peak. Perhaps I might blame it on our age of sins But in the end, it is I that wronged. The avalanche starts, ...

The wind sent you a kiss in shape of a shiver across the nape of your neck as she tapped her cigarette into the ashtray across from you. I like ...

Well, first off this is VERY small sample. So small I am afraid to comment on it in great detail. But here we go There was a constricted and seemingly ...

The style was nice. I loved how you went from complex thoughts into very simple, single word lines. Nicely done. I have an issue with the choppiness (sorry if someone ...

Excellent. This poem has great imagery, flows decently, and is not cliched. Good for you :smt041 The one thing I am confused about is the grass (EDIT: which people have ...

Waoh. Sorry. I thought at first that those mistakes were horrid. Now you said they're just little mistakes, which means I swore for a few days about nothing. xD Thanks ...

Jetpack covered the majority of what I wanted to say so I guess the only thing I have to add is keep writing. The only way you get better is ...

By request of posting them...;D Moonlight Decision Let's take a walk on the wild side, And forget all others that crossed the tracks. Let's dream up a better way to ...

Not the morning lights or the dying days. Not the living tree or the darkened night. Nothing can be compared to you. Nothing in the masterpiece of this world can ...

The awkwardness of first love, The confusion of new feelings. The scramble of trying to understand yourself... and your "friend". I called him my first love, but I didn't realize ...