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  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Moon

    High above he sails the sky, A starry waste he passes by. An opalescent globe, wrapped in an argent robe; The Sun behind his tail, he's ever on the fly. ...

    Aug 23, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Where Are You?

    Hello! Welcome to YWS, sorry it's late. It's a great community here, I hope you enjoy yourself. Your piece was lovely. I loved your hook and it kept me wanting ...

    Aug 21, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Enough

    Hello Grant! I see you are a new member. Welcome to YWS. You have an idea here, (obviously) but you need to give us more as readers. We are craving ...

    Aug 17, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: untitled poem

    To be honest, the ending of this poem seemed to harsh for the way it began. A gun comes into the picture rather randomly. If you meant this to strike ...

    Aug 17, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: How We're Spending Friday Night...

    This could be a good piece but as I agree with the above review, I have no clue who "they" are. Your idea of "they" switches on and off. The ...

    Aug 17, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Someone cold as you

    Drip! Drop! Drip drop! [clever hook] It's raining I thought to myself [thoughts are usually put in quotations but maybe you ignored this purposely? But I've also seen it without ...

    Aug 8, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Night the Water Came

    This was pretty good. Some colorful use of words, good imagery at times. Usually my reviews are quite detailed but that's only when I have some very serious opinions to ...

    Aug 8, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: To My Love

    May this only be pretend, our use for each other as reflective muses. First stanza, I think you should have more of a better what's called a "hook" here. The ...

    Jul 30, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Summer storms

    Hmm.. At first I thought "This poem is going to be a total bust". I apologize if that offends you. This poem was beautiful although the first stanza was a ...

    Jul 28, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: a rose of love...

    From his heart grew a red red rose as deep and passionate as the sea, but as strong as steel. He shared it with her, his lover in which the ...

    Jul 28, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Lost without your love,

    You loved me once, do you remember. From April, June, to September. GREAT BEGINNING! (: You were so confident. I was shy. I had never cried over a guy. Then ...

    Jul 28, 2008


I have lived through much, and now I think I have found what is needed for happiness. A quiet secluded life in the country, with the possibility of being useful to people to whom it is easy to do good... then rest, nature, books, music, love for one's neighbor - such is my idea of happiness.
— Leo Tolstoy