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Hey! So overall I really enjoyed this poem. It was very easy to read and the lines connected well. I agree with the line "And here I must stay" sounding ...

Hey, reviewing again! :) I like how you tell the whole story, there's a progression from the rush of wanting someone for the first time to actually getting them and ...

Hey, so obviously you use imagery well here. There are a few technical points I thought might be helpful to point out, though. Mostly, the two stanzas feel disjointed, there's ...

The idea here is great, and reminds me of some thoughts I've had too. However, it is a little confusing in the beginning. You switch from one line about a ...

Hey, so I think most of the poem has a good flow to it. I like the lack of punctuation, actually. It helps replicate the fast paced day you seem ...

Hi. So like me, you must love rhymes. I also write in complete rhyme patterns, but it can be tricky because some rhymes come out forced. Your emotion here is ...

I like the idea of this poem, and the more developed lines really struck me. I think, though, you should try to add more to the lines, even if that ...

First, you have great imagery, the dream in the beginning as well as the description of the characters. I can tell a lot about both characters based on the way ...

As everyone says, picturing the poem is very easy, which is a great quality. I would suggest, if you wanted to make this piece stronger, try varying your vocabulary. A ...

You have some great metaphors here, and a very clear point of view, but I would suggest looking back on the tenses you use. You switch between past and present ...