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it Naked Brothers Band. The song is the same as the movie. anyone else? MATT

I love them all. I cired in the 4th book, when BUTLER DIES. and when HOLLY DIED in the 4th book. And in the new one ARTY MURDERS HIMSELF adn ...

ok. With all the talk, YOU KILLED THE STORY. You just killed it with all of the duiscription. What you need to do is sit down and REWRITE THE WHOLE ...

THIS WAS THE BEST PIECE EVER. You did everything correct. Not a a single error. Now you should write more. Then you can become, a good, no GREAT writer. TRUST ...

thisd was an iffy piece. I do not know what this is from. I also do not know much about the people or the setting. Use more talk. Also use ...

hoped you liked that! AT RISE: a hospital, the three kids are in beds. SPENCER (Shay), LAURA (Benson) are there. DOCTOR is looking at scans. SPENCER: doctor, is Carly and ...

This was a very good piece. Though in some places I went um. This is bedcause of too much DISCRIPTION. that will give you your downfall. Also too much TALK. ...

ok. and here is chapter 4, if you don't mind: I really like where I'm heading, I think though, it's too random. What do you think? I also think that ...

The r-rated scene. Eeek. Please edit so it is ... more sophisticated. Plus I don't think in movie-verse the characters would do that anyway. [According to what I have heard ...

Okay, I just want to start with this-a little too confusing. You should definitely try to clarify who is talking when. they were married. Who was married? ZAc and V/ ...

BUMP up my thread! space

It was a good plot, but the use of copyrighted characters is plagerism and is illegal. I recomend you change the story a bit to make it your own. NOTE: ...

This was just plane BAD. You need to spell better. You also need to work on your grammar. If you think that I am being harsh, I am not. It ...

This is a very intetresting thing. You must work on spelling, grammer. and all that stuff. What you also need is to write better. If you can not write better, ...

That was good. I have never read anything like it. That is a good thing. I like it. But it seems too childish to me, like something Barny would say. ...