Sorry, made no sense to me. It was too confusing to be funny. You need to improve on grammar and spelling.
This is the first episode of 5.
Basically, this is a bit of icarly that is the bomb! it will make you sad, happy, or any other thing that I say.
AND NOW, I PRESENT: icrash!
AT RISE: carly's car. Sam, Freddie, Carly are in it.
CARLY: watch the road freddie!
FREDDIE: I'm trying hun.
SAM: I can not believe that you've been dating all because of my dare.
CARLY: I know, and look what happened to us!
FREDDIE: P.F. is tight, Nevel is re-appering, and I ran out of my Randy-O's
SAM: and I ate all of the jerky!
(car swerves by them)
CARLY: watch out!
FREDDIE: I'm trying...
CARLY: trying is not enough...
(CARLY kisses FREDDIE on lips)
FREDDIE: Oh my god!
SAM: We're gonna crash!
FREDDIE: goodbye my love, see you in heaven
(we hear a BOOM and video of a car crashing into their car is shown)
END OF SCENE 1
(leave it all to me)
I will update later
Sorry, made no sense to me. It was too confusing to be funny. You need to improve on grammar and spelling.
That was stupid and didnt make any sense
carly would never date freddie, we all know
the characters acted like totally different poeple
and yeah i didnt understand
it was really dumb, end of story
Made no sense.
Characters were out of character.
Carly doesnt like bets or dares in the first place.
And Carly wouldnt date Freddie, everyone knows thaat from the show.
and last but not least edit this to make it right.
make it where the things that are happening are acually possible things the characters would do.
I personally thought it was confusing and wierd.
I mean come on, 13 yr olds having sex on a webshow?? get real about this.
I dont know what to say actually
If you wanted to write a funny play then improve this one cause its kinda confusing.
ANd if not then I dont know what a mess you made.
Just write it all over from the starting.
I can not believe that you've been dating all because of my dare.
OH MY GOD! She had sex with Freddie?
I thought it was somewhat corny. I think you should scap it and start over. Plus, think about what the people are saying doesn't it sound funny to you. And doesn't Craly kind of think that Freddie is dorky so, why would she date him? It's just so very werid.
That was really weird it didn't make sense at all!!!!
We all know Carly doesn't like dares or bets.
It was just weird...
It didn't make sense at all!!!!
Wait, I said that already?
But it was totally confusing.
Oh yeah, and you should've
posted it into fan section.
Actually, you shouldn't have
posted it at all.
Yeah you should update it later.
And I'll check on it and see if it's better.
But trust me I doubt it
hoped you liked that!
AT RISE: a hospital, the three kids are in beds. SPENCER (Shay), LAURA (Benson) are there. DOCTOR is looking at scans.
SPENCER: doctor, is Carly and her friends ok?
LAURA: PLEASE MAKE IT SO! I CAN NOT BEAR TO LOOSE FREDDIE SO YOUNG, WHY I 'M NOT A GRADMOTHER YET!
DOCTOR: You might wish to re-think that statement Laura, my scans show that..
SPENCER: OH MY GOD! She had sex with Freddie?
DOCTOR: Yes, on icarly, on Saterday.
LAURA: OH MY GOD!
SPENCER: are the three..I mean four, OK?
DOCTOR: I think so, but I will need six singing chipmunks, lipstick, and a water bed
LAURA: and I'll get some disposible diapers!
(END OF SCENE 2)
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