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Re: Eric I hope you knew
May Eric rest in peace, darling. This is definitely a sad story but I'm glad you added the learning aspect into it. This past year, there was a freshman who ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: Dominoes
Oh wow. That was wonderful! I thuroughly enjoyed reading this. I livestock the way that the dominoes were used as a metaphor for the different events. It was very clever. ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: Beskonechnaya
I'd like to start off by saying that you have written this piece very beautifully. I think that you wrote just enough to keep it interesting and that the flow ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: The Witnesses (1)
When I began to read this, I thought the "he" was someone else that the main character was speaking of. I immediately became intrigued because of this. When you introduced ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: The Graveyard
So does he die at the end?? The old man dies, right? That's the body? I must say that when I began to read this, I could see a lot ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: UNFINISHED (1)
Hey there :) Singingwriter1673 here to review. Over all, I like the idea of the story. I like how you introduced the important characters and their relationship to one another. ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: The Fog
I just want to start off by saying that I am so sorry for your loss. I have a little sister that is 6 years younger than me so I ...
Jun 30, 2013 -
Re: The Words You Sing to me
Alright so I'm not exactly sure how to review Lyrics but I sure will try :) If it's supposed to be song lyrics, it's a little short. I love the ...
Jun 29, 2013 -
Re: A Love story Gone Wrong- Part 2
Alright, so like the last part, it is very choppy. But I am very curious to know what happens next. I like the fact that you separated everything by school ...
Jun 29, 2013 -
Re: A Love Story Gone Wrong
This is an interesting story. I'm excited to see where it goes. :) It was written nicely, though I thought it was choppy in some places. There were a it ...
Jun 29, 2013 -
Re: The Coming Storm
I love this story :) it has a lot of description and I felt like I was there, watching the rain and destruction I the tree. The only thing that ...
Jun 29, 2013 -
Re: Almost Dead (part two)
I love the twist! I honestly didn't see it coming but I think the part when she first realizes that it's him should be a bigger reaction. There were a ...
Jun 29, 2013 -
Re: Almost Dead (part one)
First off: "Hauntings are like ghost prom." Love it! That one sentence made me smile. Okay, so I really love the concept and idea of this story. It's super cute ...
Jun 29, 2013 -
Re: Risk
In general, I like the idea of the story and I think that with a lot of help, it can become amazing. Now, I do have to say that I ...
Jun 29, 2013 -
Re: Siesi's Story-can anyone think of a better title?
Over all, this is a cute story. I like the plot and the way you made the dialogue in a way that showed the different financial status of the characters. ...
Jun 29, 2013
