simplycomplex

I really like the way you used the short sentences in the short stanzas. Good use of few words to create the mood in this poem, too. In this stanza: ...

I like your use of the "dead rose" image. But your poem just didn't seem very deep or satisfying to me as a reader. I guess I'm trying to say ...

I really like how you did the line breaks in this poem. Also, I think this poem flows smoothly and is, as StoryWeaver13 said, somewhat delicate while innocent and pure. ...

I like the rhyming pattern and the mood you create here. Some of the rhyming seems a little forced, though, and doesn't flow as well. On this enchanted afternoon, This ...

Interesting word for describing the sound of ink dripping... but neat poem, I like it. Also, I like how you repeat the " Dop " in a pattern and the ...

Ha, ha that's cute! :) For a quick poem like that it's pretty good. Just your last stanza: And this is my story Of a hectic first day But don't ...

Wow, this poem is interesting and creative. I love rhyming. So good job with that :). How the roses smell so sweet, And their thorns a warning sign, A signal ...

Very powerful. The way you only used end punctuation on some lines seemed to emphasize those particular lines in the poem. I don’t want to be emotionless! I don’t want ...

Haha I like this poem! It's funny and clever, and I can never write anything funny. You used to snore in my ear, And mumble in your sleep, But now ...

Neat poem! It's very creative and different in a good way. Something that stuck out kinda weird: And Jupiter can't seem to regulate peace, Separated by the asteroid field, And ...

Interesting, but it's good. At first, toward the beginning, the poem's a bit weaker, but toward the end it's stronger. There aren't any mistakes in grammar or anything as far ...

Wow. That's a powerful poem. I like the similes and the rhyming, though some of the rhyming words don't fit as easily as the others, but that's okay it's still ...

This is the sort of fun, silly poem I can imagine finding in a children"s book - and that's a good thing! I especially like the first two stanzas. They ...

I like the beginning :). Your grammar has a few flaws, though mostly things like saying "ill" instead of "I'll". I caught a misspelling, too. Also, I thought it got ...