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Hey GML! Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = words/phrases/sentences that I think could work better. Onto the review I cried. Every year it was the same. Him ...

Hey! I'll try not to repeat everything the person above me did. Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = words/phrases/sentences that I think would work better. Depending what ...

Hey ChernobyllyInclined! Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Things/words/sentences that I believe would work better. 'Tis my first fantasy. Any and all feedback is terribly appreciated. _____

Hey RoryLengend, Your post looked lonley so I decided to review it, anyway, Here's the key to my review: Red= Comments Bold = words/sentences that I think would work better. ...

Here goes my critique. Key: Red= comments Bold= Words or sentences that I think would fit better (sometimes I simply delete words and put my bold words in their place ...

Hey, I just saw this and decided to review it. The lengend for my reviewing: Red= Comments Bold = Stuff that I think sounds better, I usually delete parts of ...

Sorry if this is a bit repetitive, but I decided to give this piece an in-depth review. The lengend is: Red= Comments, suggestions Bold = words that I think would ...

Again, this has the same legend as my other one with the red, bold, strikethrough review :-) Let's get started :D Chapter Two A group of elves, including Arias left ...

Sorry if this repeats what others say but here is my review. Review key: Red= comments Bold= things that I've inserted, things that I think will work better, ways to ...

Every happy family is just alike, but all unhappy families are unhappy in their own way.For a happy family is defined by a lack of problems, while an unhappy one ...

I did this insanley long review on this, but then my computer crashed. :cry: Anyway, I'll try my best to see if I can pick back up on all the ...

Yvette sat in front of her vanity mirror, and played with her reflection, experimenting by making her brow less furrowed and her nose less hawk-like. -- This feels awkward. Instead ...

Welcome! I'm scasha! If you have any questions, feel free to PM. Now, onto the critique. I am imprisoned in a black robe; the white wig on my head reeks ...

I was standing in the middle of this get-up shopping center with my mother. -- I didn't really understand what you were saying here. INstead of saying get-up shopping center, ...

WOW! That was great! I loved the ending! I totally didn't expect that. :-) Onto the particulars or at least the general particulars Things I adored: - the quote at ...