sazza_1996

Well.. the poem was good. I have to agree with Tassen Spellbinder that the italics were off putting. You also seemed top put 'gold' and 'lie' in capitals, but as ...

Hey!! It was a really good poem, but I couldn't read it very well. You don't need quotation marks when your writing a poem only when someone is speaking.

Hey!!!! It was just as Daisy and Juniper said intense but I didn't get the whole story. Though it was well written. Keep it up!!!

Hey, this was a really great poem and I really enjoyed it!! Keep it up!! :)

Hey, that was really well written and I really enjoyed this poem. I loved how you changed from his drunken night to his day at work!!! Keep it up! :)

Its well written written for a new member!! :)

Well. all I can say is that it was really well written. It has a really nice rhythm and I really enjoyed reading it! :)

It would be better if you told it was a pig at the start because it sounded like an army poem, until the very last lines when you finally told ...

It was really well written and the old english language you used was really good how you you used it. Keep it up!!

I loved the poem! But can I just say would it be better on the 7th line you could have said 'move slowly' insted of slowly move' I'm just saying ...

All I can say is.. well.. it was wow and very well written. :)

It was really well written. I can't exactly find very much wrong with it... but capitalise the first letter of every sentence. :)

Well, this is really well written but don't forget to capitalise the first letter in every sentence apart from that it was really good! :)

This is a really well written poem, only thing that was wrong with it was that you spelt innocence wrong.

It was well written. You could have left out the 'its' on the 6th line.