Published September 21, 2009
I imagine as you move
That you do it with such grace
To defy in me
The strong conviction
That I’ve been misplaced.
I watch and you are lonely,
Held within a place you knew,
Where breath is kept in,
Ticks of toes, and beats
Gone without a trace.
As each shaky breath unleashed
No truth, but my wanting ruse.
Rattle upon me,
False ecstasy; seen,
Felt, but misconstrued.
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Its well written written for a new member!!
that was really beautifull. it was defenently a pleasure to read.only nit pick is that capitalized every line is when it need not. otherwise i really enjoyed reading it.
First off, welcome to YWS! Nice having you(:
Your poem was great, perfect, really.
Nice job(: Keep up the good work.
Welcome to YWS..
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Your poem kinda left me speechless
Good job...
(oh and the speechless thing is a good thing just to let you know..