sarebear

Hiya there Boo, sare here for a review! Annoying ditties aside, I do have a review for you. I'll show you commitment It's five years with no face I like ...

Hi Fizza, Well, not having read Macbeth I have no idea what I'm talking about, but I'm happy to give you help on your prose, so here goes! Fog and ...

I love this! Especially the lines about the sticks and the ears! I disagree with Amflifler--it doesn't really need a deeper meaning and it's one of those poems that expresses ...

Hi this is beautiful! The only thing is that I feel like their could be a story behind it that doesn't get showcased in this poem. You might consider thinking ...

Hi, I think this is a fresh, new portrayal of a comfortably old topic! First for some nitpicks... Sometimes I would delete the comma here inspiration evades me, Hiding like ...

Hi, Sarebear here for a review Well, I'm a pretty tough reviewer so don't take everything I say to heart (no pun intended). First of all, I feel like this ...

This is really cool! I haven't seen anything like it before I don't think!!! The tumor grows now. It breaks off, and wanders. Anywhere on earth, Adaptive radiation occurs, And ...

Hi, Actually I quite like this. The opening caught my attention and was very powerful. My mind is a blistered crusade, vengeful to the words you speak and the tones ...

Hi bm, Well, for a first poem, this is very good! Your sense of flow and stream-of-consciousness is excellent. I have a few comments to improve the way the poem ...

Hi, To be honest, this sounds professional! I'm very impressed. I particularly enjoyed your use of colors throughout the poem to convey the mood. No, I didn't find it repetitive. ...

Hi! Well, this was a fun read! I really loved the last stanza. I guess I liked both of your poems. The first one is more serious and very beautiful, ...

I definitely enjoyed this. I especially liked the beginning: Her death began with a touch, A push, A shove, An uncaring caress. Or perhaps a little before? With a racing ...

Hi, Okay, so my first comment is that this sounds more like song lyrics than a poem. I love the last two lines, they would be great for the chorus ...

Hi, Okay, the first thing you should do is proof-read. Capitalize your eyes, add some punctuation. I agree with Kid that you should eliminate repetition. Plead and also I would ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. The only part I didn't love was the first line. The lack of punctuation unnerved me. Did you mean: "Fortuitous? Not the king?" or "Fortuitous, ...