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Hi rysa, First of all, if you'll allow my boldness, I would just like to go through and give you some grammatical corrections (in addition to stylistic nitpicks). Things I ...

Hi Charity, Very nice poem you have here--well written, intriguing, not at all cliche. I feel like I've never read it before, which is unusual these nice work on that! ...

Okeydokey...down to work. So, I definitely agree with Kyllorac about the line breaks. Too much. If I were you (which I'm not) I would simply eliminate about half of your ...

Hi L----I mean, STICHES :) So....this is totally awesome. Totally reflects your personality, I can totally hear you reading it aloud. Actually, this isn't really much of a review as ...

Oooh....I love it. Simple, cute, perfect--and, of course, deliciously morbid. Actually, this isn't much of a review in that I just like this piece a lot. I like that it's ...

Well hello there...nice poem! Firstly, I have some nitpicks (as always). My Sweet Love, please be by my side. Let the fears of this fragile heart subside. "Side and "subside" ...

Hiya Talia, This is a lovely little nugget of poem. I like it a lot!I don't think it needs more...I like the bluntness. I also found the "game of cat ...

Hi Bexy, Here for another review! So here goes... Firstly: I think you might want to up the rating from 12+, this has some, er, mature content. :P Chapter 4: ...

Hiya Bexy, I am here for my promised review. So I'm going to review as I read, and then give you my overall stuff at the end. The Prologue: I ...

Hi Murtuza, Alright. Settling in for what could be a very long review. SO.....first of all, I do like your general idea. My very favorite bit of this is your ...

I..........LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D This is absolutely superbly fantastically awesome and I absotively posilutely love it!!! Oh...a review...okay, well I'll see if there's anything at all th

Hi Bryn, This is extraordinarily powerful...The end is absolutely beautiful. It's dark, but that's sorta the point. I'm not one for rhyming poems. However, I think that this is a ...

Hello Shiney, First of all, I'm extremely impressed by your skill at acrostics. The poem flows normally, I wouldn't know it was an acrostic if you hadn't said so and ...

Well hello shybluishflower (by the way, I love your username). This is a very nice little poem. I especially love your second stanza, the first two lines. Very lovely. First ...

Hiya, This is very beautiful. It's thick to read--I found myself reading much slower than usual--sort of like swimming through heavy cream....I like it. I especially liked your ending. There ...