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This is very beautiful, Yatta, because you have chosen each word carefully. There is no excess here. Your words echo the heaviness that you feel. Although there are few of ...

Hi Words, Firstly, I should tell you that visually this poem is extremely appealing! I don't usually pay much attention to that sort of thing, especially on a website that ...

Hi Elizabeth! down to business. Frankly, I was shocked as I got into your story. The first paragraphs set me up for something totally different than what you threw at ...

Hi Adam, So after reading up to here, this is my favorite one so far. I like that it is more conversational, sounds more like you just talking, than the ...

Okay, thanks for the reminder. I totally forgot. But now I am back, and I will devote at least 10 minutes to this. Maybe. :) So...I'll do nitpicks first. The ...

Hi heather, The first thing I'd like to say is that I really like this piece! It is sincere without being cheesy, and you've done a good job using examples ...

Hey there Adam, Alrighty now...nitpicks first, I suppose. Such a wonderful sight, it brightens up once again. this line is a little awkward...maybe better to say, "It brightens me up ...

Hey Adam, Okay, so I'm going to do nitpicks first and then the rest of the review. There is a house there. In ore, impressed, we walk towards this nature ...

Hi Ayla, So I'm going to do what I usually do and nitpick as I read, and then give you my overall stuff at the end. Here goes! Now I ...

Hiya there ancient! First of all, let me just say, that if I could hit the like button, I would have. In fact, remind me when the likes come back ...

Hi BB Well know...I'm actually not sure at all how I feel about this. At first glance, I didn't like the spacing here. But it's sort of growing on me. ...

Hi Anna, Well, I see what you're trying to do here. I agree with HPR about the rhyming. Your first doesn't rhyme, and your second, third, and fourth seem to ...

Hi Deanie, This is a nice poem. My major issue with it is that it's not poem-y enough. Not to be vague or anything. I guess for me, your first ...

Hiya Form So...I think this is a very beautiful poem. While I don't agree with it, it is very well written and definitely thought provoking. I loved your opening stanza-- ...

Hi Audy, This is...interesting. And kinda depressing too. Mostly depressing. Nevertheless, I definitely understand your purpose here. I like your intro a lot--the beginning two lines are really very n