sarahcrosbeh

Yes, this is very good, but very short...maybe alittle too short. The rhyme is also very good :) Basically everything said above.

Thanks for that it's a good tip. When you read it normally, you tend to miss really obvious mistakes. My english teacher told me to write, then go watch tv ...

This is very simple, but i like the simplicity of it. I couldn't really find a meaning or story in here, but i think it's a good idea/start. :) x

I don't really get what this is about. I like it, in a strange way. But I can't be sure of what you are trying to say in this poem.

I really like this alot, you've described things well. But you need to put in capital letters. :)

I hate MS word sometimes. I spell checked it loads and it failed to pick up that question mark. [bangs head on table]

The randomness of this is cool :lol: Platypi are cute The word its self makes me chuckle ^-^

I really like this. I like the way you've put it in IM format and such, and it kept me reading untill the end. :)

Oh dear, i've just realised how many times i used the word started in that second/third paragraph.

I like the italics... I also liek the bit about peeling off the new paint to get to the old paint K, my reveiw was simple :)

xD I feel your pain, i have the same

Ooh i like the way this story is going Lizzy :] Keep writing (Y)

I agree :)

Aww another cute one.. I see you are being influenced by childhood games with this and the last poem :) Super

This is cute lyok ^-^ I likes it alot