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I haven't read the first chapter, but I thought this was pretty good! The overall pace was a bit too fast and events felt quite rushed, personally I'd try and ...

I'm so sorry if this is based on your school experiences right now, and if it is I want you to know that you are so much stronger than you ...

Wow. I've not read the first few chapters (yet) but I think I understood what was going on and I'm really impressed with your writing style and the power of ...

This was lovely! I'd add some punctuation though, to allow us to read it the way you do, maybe? I'll add them where I think they might go but feel ...

Hi! I'd just like to tell you how much I like this story so far! The first bit about protecting the realm reminded me quite a bit of game of ...

Hi! Well. That was intense. And scary. And I'm not going to lie, that last sentence has got me terrified for going to bed tonight, but overall I really loved ...

Hi there! So to start off - I LOVED YOUR BEGINNING! It immediately got me wanting to read more, and kept me interested, so well done with that! I was ...

Hi! I really liked this! I haven't read the first part of the prologue but this alone has drawn me in! I liked your writing style, I liked how you ...

Hi! So to start I want to tell you how much I enjoyed this, I want to read on, I want to know what happens, and you really took showing ...

This is beautiful. Its got a slow pace but that's not a bad thing. It made me want to keep reading, want to find out. I loved the main character, ...

Hi! So first off- great start! You kept me reading throughout, and your writing flows really well! I LOVE the dragon side of Damien, and your description of him was ...

Oh gosh this is amazing! I loved in the first stanza the line 'that never ending pain/ of dancing till your feet grow sore" because I used to do ballet ...