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Heylo. Nice work on this piece. Just gonna reiterate a few points. My doctor says i have a problem Capital 'I'. They ask me questions like "what does this mean ...

Hey there. You've got an interesting story. :) I enjoyed reading it. I was able to buy a car, but I personally liked walking, I was able to think more. ...

Heylo. This poem was a wee bit jerky, as others have already said. Alrighty then.. when our eyes met that very first time they held for an eternity unblinking we ...

Hey there. I really enjoyed reading this poem. I could imagine the scenes quite vividly thanks to your descriptions. Thank you for that. It was a delight to read. Anyway, ...

G'day. This was a pretty interesting story. GoldenQuill has already mentioned it, but I'll just reiterate the point. When a character speaks, end the dialogue with a comma. So.. “No ...

Hi there. This poem was really good, and there were few mistakes as far as I could tell. I am extremely quire , yet I make sense to me. Did ...

Heylo. Good job with the poem. It was short and sweet and it was delicious to lap up. There was, however, a small mistake. I am the person you do ...

I think this chapter would have more impact if you had described the scenes more vividly. It seems rushed, and the scenes were disjointed. Perhaps you could've spent more time ...

Heylo! Just popping by to give you a quick review. My stomache the butterflies. Spelling error here. :) And sing my heart felt lullibies. I think you meant 'lullabies' right? ...

Hey there. You're my first review in months, so I'm pretty rusty. Hope it's of some help to you though. Firstly, this sentence kinda confuses me. My predator would not ...

I don't think there's anything wrong with your story. :) I enjoyed it very much. ^^ Gosh, my review doesn't really seem to be a review. :( Ah well.... P.M. ...

Hey there... I kinda agree with Meevs and B&I. A rating is necessary. You've got swearing involved, so before the mods get annoyed, I think you gotta change the rating ...

Haha! It was cute. I almost died from all the sweetness but still... Nothing's more refreshing than sugary sweet sweetness! :D This story made me smile. I honestly found it ...

I really liked it. It was touching. :) Really. I don't think I can tell you on what to improve on though. (If there is.) I'm really bad with poetry. ...

I really hope this isn't the last chapter. I'd really love to read more. The end of the chapter was full of suspense. I liked that. :) I'm not supposed ...