Published October 26, 2008
Yea, last quarter we always had free time at the end of the day, and this is what I came up with to pass the time. The people are all named from my class, so I guess it would be funnier if you knew them. I'm really not serious with this little piece, I just wanted to see what people thought of it.
Once upon a time n the magical land of Pinkdom, there lived a beautiful princess named Gabrielle. She was very nice and everyone in Pinkdom loved her. Gabrielle lived in a huge palace on top of Enchanted Hill, right underneath the Eternal Rainbow. Next door, Sir Sean the Leprechaun watched over the kingdom's gold. The Magical Meadows were filled with herds of Rainbow ponies and Dream ponies. The people of Pinkdom all lived in a little village surrounded by lovely flowers and fruit trees. Down by the seashore there lived a magical dragon named Puff. Puff had a very special job: he had to guard the kingdom of Pinkdom from the evil Emos that wanted to steal Sir Sean's gold.
On the day of Gabrielle's birthday, she received many wonderful presents, but her favorite by far was from he best friends, Malika and Faith. They had found a Flowered unicorn roaming in a nearby valley. Gabrielle named her new unicorn Sunshine. Sunshine was given free roaming around Pinkdom, and soon everyone knew and loved him.
One day, unknown to Gabrielle, the Emo leader Dalton was carrying out an attempt to steal the gold. Luckily, Sunshine found them first. Sunshine was so sweet and loving to that he turned the smll, cold heart of the Emos into big, loving, warm ones. Dalton realized how horrible he had been and apologized to Gabrielle for it. Then, all the Emos moved into Pinkdom. Soon Dalton and Gabrielle had become great friends.
Not long after the Emos came into Pinkdom, Dalton and Gabrielle decided to get married. There was a huge turnout for the wedding; everyone in Pinkdom brought gifts for the new couple.
Dalton and Gabrielle were happily married, and one day they were blessed with a handsome young son: Prince Duncan. They raised him to love PInkdom as much as they did, and they all lived Happily Ever After.
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Again, I'm not serious about this story, I just wanted to see what people said.
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Hahaha. That's a col idea. I might atually write that.
I disagree about that Ali. If the song is abotu drug use then why did the Solomon elementary 4th graders have to sing it for may day a few years back? It's about a dragon named Puff. Really, have you ever heard it? lolz. Just pleaying with you Ali don't be mad at me. (Really, right now I bet you're secretly training Pancakes to bit my finger off the next time I try to hold him. Haha. Just kidding, of course.
Thanks everyone!
Hmm, I never would have thought a guy would like this story.... but then I think you're the first guy to ever read this, so... yeah okay! And you're not annoying. It's hard to annoy an annoying person. lolz
Haha!
It was cute. I almost died from all the sweetness but still... Nothing's more refreshing than sugary sweet sweetness!
This story made me smile. I honestly found it adorable.
The sweetness was overwhelming but that's just because I'm me.
Your friend, Sean, is such a good lad.
A bag of virtual gold for his erm... is sportsmanship the correct word to use? Ah. Not writing for all this time is having a toll on my English.
*looks at Chosenofair and Alicat*
Ah.. Everyone has their own opinion.
Anyway... Next time you write a story like this, can you set it in a kingdom called Bluedom? (I like blue.) XD
And let there be evil gnomes and money-faced dwarves?
C'mon, dedicate it to me, Jamie! Haha.
Nah, just kiddin'. I won't be so bad to ya. ^^
-Max.
P.S.
Sorry if I'm annoying. I kinda had too much sugar. Argh.
That's super harsh, Chosenofair. It was just a joke (fun) peice, I'm sure!
Personally, I liked it. It was funny and it made me smile. :] Kind of like looking at the notebooks you used to write in in, like, the 4th or 5th grade (in a good way).
But you do kow that Puff the magic dragon refers to drug use... Just wondering if you knew...
Alicat
Haha! I know, that's pretty much everything I intended it to be. And just for the record, Sean volunteered to be the leprechaun, and it's Pinkdom, not Ponyville. Ha! Sorry, but what you said is just making me laugh like crazy right now.
Ummm... wow. I honestly don't know what to say to this. It is so... cliched. So strange. It's like someone took a Disney movie and put the happy-happy charms on steroids. And set it in Ponyville. This honestly makes me feel sick to my stomach with all the happy-lovey charms. I understand that it was a joke, but god. I feel sorry for the guy who is the namesake for the leprechaun. Jeez! I still don't know what to say...