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I think that mine in the first line is supposed to be mind

Thanks! I fixed that.

I think I've fixed some of the rhythm issues

Has been edited! Hopefully it'll be a bit better now.

Thanks, it's still a work in progress :). I will definitely work on rhythm, I want it to all be like the first four lines.

Yeah, I totally get what you mean. THe first 4 lines started it, and I was trying to write a poem around those. I am still working on I, I ...

Thanks, I fixed that little and. It was meant to be capitalized, but I just got rid of it, then capitalized.

I want to draw back my correction on the double hyphen; I was unaware that that is something that is used as a dash when unable to type one. So ...

Ah, yes. I am an editor at heart :), thanks.

Sorry, what's SC? Spell check? I feel like its something really obvious and I'm being silly.

Oh okay, that's awesome! Thanks again.

Yay, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review, again, great improvements. I will let you know, though, about that last one. Falls was meant to be a noun, ...

Aww, thanks so much! I'm glad I managed to write it in a way that so many others could relate :) Thanks, those are really good punctuation improvements. I will ...

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! I did not realize I did that, I will definitely keep that in mind when I edit, thanks.

Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it! And those were really helpful suggestions, will definitely edit with these in mind ASAP :)